Rhyme and Reason

I enjoy writing in rhyme, but it can be tricky. There's nothing worse than bad rhyme. Okay, there are a lot of things worse than bad rhyme, but bad rhyme really stinks.

Avoid near ryhmes.

For example:

I try to sleep
but sleep won't come.
I wiggle my elbows.
I wiggle my thumbs.

Thumbs almost rhymes with come, but not quite.

Avoid forced rhyme. Forced rhyme uses words that sound right but don't fit the context of the piece. It sounds contrived.

For example:

My legs won’t behave,
Though I tuck them in.
They fling and flop
and it makes me spin.

Spin rhymes, but it doesn't add much to the piece.


It's also best to avoid rhymes that don't match the way we talk.

I wanted to sleep
In a tall oak tree.
My mom fixed that.
"No" said She.

I got my rhyme, but it doesn't sound good, because it's not the way we talk.

Rhythm and meter and stresses also play a big part, and that's what makes the process so complex.

There are rules about these things, but I think the best test is how does it sound when you read it out loud. If it sounds right, it's a good sign. You need to listen to other people read your stuff, because you know how it is supposed to sound. You can make it sound right. How does it sound when someone with no prejudices reads it.

I'm working on a rhyming piece with some really classy ladies, and one talented gentleman. It's eye opening. My hardest task was to deal with rhyming words that didn't stress the right syllable.

For example:

It works for giraffes
but not for me.
Sleeping animal style
is not easy.

Easy rhymes with me, but the stress in on the first syllable instead of the rhyming syllable.

Next I tried:

It works for giraffes
but not for me.
Sleeping animal style
is no guarantee.

The rhyme works better, but guarantee is not really a kid-friendly word.

I'm still stuck on this one. Nothing seems to work. If you have an idea, please send it along. Maybe your idea is the one I'm looking for.

Linda Garner

Here’s a Five-Star read! Don’t miss it! At Season's End

There was Paw in the lead goin’ as hard as he could, then Maw, Tim next, and me tryin’ to catch up knowin’ they must all be crazy. Even the river didn’t stop Paw. Clothes and all, he jumped into the whirlin’, swirlin’ waters of the great Columbia.
At this Maw let out a scream. Mebby she thought Paw was goin’ to end it all. Then Tim yelled, “Oh, no, Paw!” But I was too surprised and scared to say anythin’.
I suppose it was just a second or two, but it seemed like minutes before he came up again to show us he had two heads and four arms. Then the mighty water turned him over to prove he had four legs. That was when we realized Paw was holdin’ on for dear life to a young drownin’ boy.
Hit hard by the Great Depression, Sal’s family loads up an old Buick and heads out to find work wherever they can. Driving from place to place, living off the little they can make, they soon realize they’ll never be able to afford to settle down again.
Then, when tragedy strikes, Sal and her brother must learn to fend for themselves. In a world of harsh realities, there’s no room left for romance. But that can’t stop Sal from dreaming of a life with Ben—a boy from another migrant family—even though she knows she may never see him again.
This heartwarming story about growing up in a troubled time is sure to resonate with modern readers of all ages.

Eric Hendershot, a writer/director has produced several family friendly films and documentaries.  At Season’s End is one of the most heart-warming stories I’ve read in a long time. Hendershot’s writing style is smooth and engaging. His character development is superb as this family goes from hilarity to tragedy as the pages slip by. The book is engaging and a fun easy read.

Paw and Maw become migrant workers during the great depression. They, along with their children Tim and Sal, create an old-fashioned family filled with kindness and morality.

Trouble devastates this family, and Tim and Sal learn to live by their wits. Will Sal ever see Ben, the boy she truly loves again? Odds are against it.

I highly recommend this read.

Christy

Drop Everything and Read

Have you heard of D.E.A.R day. It's tomorrow. April 12. Drop Everything and Read. What a great idea. How will you celebrate?

Most of us can't have the luxury of a whole day of reading, but how about weaving some reading activities into your day. Here are a few ideas.

1. Read in the tub. Don't forget the bubble bath.

2. Carry a book in your purse or car for those odd moments you always spend waiting.

3. Choose a book to read as a family. Start it tonight over dinner. Pass the book around the table and let everyone read a page.

4. Let everyone choose something interesting from the newspaper and share it at breakfast.

5. Encourage everyone to choose a favorite quote and share it at bedtime. It can be from a current read, or just something they like. This could be a weekly activity.

We're all busy, but reading rocks. Make time for it, especially tomorrow. Let your children see you read. Turn off the TV. Turn off the video games. Read with your family. Start a new tradition. You won't be sorry.

For more ideas click here.

Let's celebrate D.E.A.R day. Drop everything and read.

Linda Garner

Picture Books

I’m taking Rick Walton’s online picture book class. If any of you are interested in writing picture books, he is a wonderful teacher and the class is so great. Rick can pull good writing out of you that you didn’t know was inside you. He has a great gift.

I’ve been reading Eve Bine-Stock’s “How to Write a Children’s Picture Book” Vol. 1 on Structure. It’s really good. I’m going to the library today to get some picture books and break them down according to her outline.

She suggests that three sections:

            Act 1 Beginning

                        Plot Twist 1

            Act 2 Middle

                        Midpoint

                        Plot Twist 2

            Act 3 End

I’m trying to check out several books she suggests and see if I can fit the plot into her plan.

Everyone knows Goodnight Gorilla

            Act 1 Beginning – Gorilla steals keys

                        Plot Twist 1 – Gorilla starts to open cages

            Act 2 Middle – Night Watchman’s lack of reaction to animals following him

                        Midpoint – Wife says “Good night” (focus shifts from the night watchman

                                                                                    to the wife’s reaction to the animals

                                                                                    in the bedroom

                        Plot Twist 2 – Gorilla follows wife home

            Act 3 End – Gorilla sound asleep

Fun concepts, huh? Check out some of your favorite books and see if they fit this structure. Let me know what you think. I’m off to the library to check out picture books.

Have a great week. Christy

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Unplugged and Talking to Myself

Self:  Hey, where are you?

Me: I thought you heard.

Self: About purple being the new color mixed with hints of orange splotches mixed in tweed. Yeah, dreadful.  It's bad news all around.

Me: Um...no. It's spring break.

Self: Spring break? Yay! Why didn't you tell me? Now I can go find myself some awesome tweed pants! What about you? Do you have any fabulousess plans.

Me: Yup. I'm spending the break at the dentist's office.

Self: I said fabulous.

Me: Actually...you said fabulousess, which isn't even a word. *smirk* And no. No fun plans. Just lots of drilling.

Self: Okay.*sneaking out back door*  Good luck with that.I hope you have a great time with all that cleaning and drilling and tooth pulling...and stuff. *running away quickly*

Me: Yup. So, so fun.

I'm unplugged this week! Spending time at the dentists. (I'm such a wild one.) Have a great week everyone! And tell me what your plans are for Spring Break! Anything fun?

Writing and Illustrating for Young Readers

So late posting this week. Having a hard time getting my **** in gear. Do you have days like that? I hate it when that happens.

On the bright side though, I am counting my pennies to see if I have enough moolah to go the WIFYR conference in June. I'm drooling at the possiblity. This is such a fabulous opportunity for picture book authors and illustrators, and it is practically in my backyard. I have been twice and I loved it.

Of course, it's not just for picture book authors, but they do have a fabulous picture book class taught by a fabulous picture book author. Not many conferences cater to us picture book people. WIFYR stands for Writing and Illustrating for Young Readers, so that covers a lot of territory. There are lots of good classes to choose from.

This year, there is also a fabulous writing contest. The prize is $1,000. Wouldn't that make your day. If you want to find out more, check here, or here.

When is the conference? Where? June 18 - 22. Sandy, UT.

Count your pennies. Maybe you can go too.

Linda Garner

Happy Spring Break

I hope you're going to have a great week. I am. I'm doing some book signings in the Phoenix and Tucson area. AND having fun with grandkids.

I'm also excited to be with Linda at LDS Storymakers in the publication primer workshop. It will be fun to work with her again. I'm really looking forward to it.

Take care. Happy Easter. Christy

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